Introduction for Unit 3 Alcohol Addiction examples:
Must include: Shock horror, written in 2nd
person narrative and is fast paced -
Are you an
alcohol addict? Alcohol is a large contributor towards epidemics in today’s
society. One of three sexual offences.
One in three burglaries. One of two street crimes. These are only a
minimal sample of the high number of statistics linking to the unpleasant
problems alcohol consumption causes. You
or a friend have been involved in any, both or all of these. Alcohol can even
result in you dying! Long-term affects like liver disease are the deadly ones.
You don’t want that do you? This raises the question in everyone's mind,
including yours: ‘What are the government
doing about these problems?’ Even more to the point, what are you doing or can
do about these issues yourself?
Effect on the reader:
I find the
effect of the 2nd person narration to be successful at drawing the
audience’s attention as the language is directly aimed at them by using
personal pronouns to include them in the article. However, I found it difficult
to create a shock horror effect when using the 2nd person narration
as I found it difficult to include shocking statistics as well as the 2nd
person narration; resulting in asking questions. This gave the feel of a
question introduction instead of a shock horror. I also found it difficult to
create a fast pace to the introduction whilst keeping in mind that I had to
give a shock horror effect of the statistics relating to alcohol consumption as
most of the facts I had gained from research needed explaining. The 2nd
person narration makes the article more emotional as it gives an expressive
persona and a more in-depth feel so that the audience can connect with the
subject more. Due to this introduction being a shock horror introduction, it
has the advantage of creating audience interest due to the facts/statistical
figures that are present as this astonished the reader if they didn’t already
know the information given to them. I felt that I successfully created audience
interest in this introduction by mixing the facts with the questions as this
made the audience think about the matter of alcohol in more depth and
consideration.
Must include: Shock horror, written in 1st
person narrative and is fast paced -
I like
drinking as much as the next person. But, I didn’t know that it takes the adult
body an estimated 2 hours to break down one single alcoholic drink. That’s for
an adult, not a teen like us. Our body would take longer. I for one drink much
more than a single drink when on the binge. I didn’t know the tragic effects
binge drinking has as well. Sure do regret my past-times now. I could be
looking at mental health problems in the future if I carry on. Let alone have a
fatal accident in the short-term. 29% of alcohol related deaths are a result of
alcohol related accidents. He was one of the 21% of men that consumed more than
double the daily guidelines in one day in the General Lifestyle Survey 2008. My
friend that is. At least I didn’t get hurt like him. I was the lucky one. Will
you be? I think before I drink now.
Effect on the reader:
The 1st
person narration ejects emotion into the article as personal experiences are
mentioned and this makes the audience empathise, agree, think about their own
experiences relating to alcohol and compare the experiences to the article’s
introduction. The slight mention of the author’s friend could be expanded in
the article more as a main subject as this creates audience interest because
the audience know that it’s a real-life story/experience. I have successfully
produced a shock horror introduction because there are many facts and
statistics within this introduction that stand out to the audience which
wouldn’t have been seen by them before. These give an element of surprise and
an audience fascination to carry on reading the article. I found it fairly easy
to write in the 1st person narration as it was easier to create a
structure to the introduction when writing in my own point of view. This
narration makes the audience believe in the article more as they trust the
personal information that the author is giving as they are exchanging emotions.
The personal pronouns used draw the audience in and makes them read on.
Finally, the fast paced introduction makes the audience read the whole
introduction before judging the article as it is snappy and straight to the
point, which would cause the audience to read on.
Must include: Summary introduction, written in
3rd person narrative and uses quite a long pace –
Despite
the fact that alcohol is a major contribution to the controversial issues in today’s
society, it also affects health of one a dramatic amount. This article aims to give
detailed information about the consumption of alcohol and which effects of alcohol
are the worst, including long-term and short-term affects. The media, alcohol
advertisements and social-networking sights can have massive affects on
teenagers in modern society, which could be a cause of the increased alcohol usage
rates in the modern world. Within the North
East, research has shown that 118 of every 100,000 under-18s in the region
needed treatment because of alcohol related incidents; resulting in figures
that are double the national average. In this 12 month period (2010-2011), the
recent study identified that more than 600 of the 9, 450 people receiving the
treatment were under-age drinkers as they were under the age of 18. This raises the question, ‘Who is to blame?’ – the one that consumes the deadly drug, the
media, social-networking sites, alcohol advertisers, influential characters of
teenagers, parents or the adults that buy the alcohol for them?
Effect on the reader:
This
introduction gives various affects on the audience. It is a summary
introduction that gives a brief summary of what the articles features are and
the content of the article. The information is given objectively from the very
start of the article in a 3rd person narration which gives the
affect of a formal, yet trustworthy tone to the article. The objective sense that
this introduction contains makes the introduction suit and aim towards a more
intelligent, older audience than teenagers. This would make this introduction
incompatible to the young audience that the alcohol magazine is aimed at as the
introduction would not create audience interest for this age range. Due to the
summary introduction being objective, the introduction lacks emotion that would
appeal to the younger audience which is the main reason as to why this
introduction isn’t aimed at the target audience. I found this article hard to
write because of the 3rd person narrative as I didn’t know how to
aim it at the correct audience effectively which meant that the target audience
wouldn’t be engaged by this introduction and won’t consequently read on. However
for the older audience it is aimed at, the long paragraph makes it seem more
serious and causes the audience to read on as it interests the reader more due
to the introduction stating facts about the modern world/events. The style and
tone of this magazine introduction contains a high degree of formality and
gives a factual account that interests the audience.
Must include: Quotation introduction, written
in 3rd person narrative and uses a long pace –
“Alcohol
is the most harmful drug because it’s so widely used,” Nutt notified the BBC
after the publication of his findings. This is highly dangerous as alcohol is
the ‘gateway’ drug to many other illicit drugs as findings have shown that many
people consume illegal drugs when under the influence of alcohol – in a study
completed in 2009, 67 percent of the subjects examined went on to smoke
marijuana after they had consumed alcohol. Many young people within the UK have
many pressures, such as peer pressure, that encourages the consumption of
alcohol; little do they know the unsafe affects that the drug causes upon them
in the short-term and even the long-term.
Effect on
the reader:
Due to this introduction being a quotation introduction, the
subject of the article (alcohol) is being pursued from the beginning. This
makes it evident to the audience that the article is about alcohol, which may
interest them to carry on reading. The quotation I have used isn’t particularly
long-winded or lengthy which gives the start of the introduction a less-boring,
snappier tone; to create audience interest. The pace as a whole is long and
fluent which gives the initial thought to the audience that the information
being portrayed is reliable and trustworthy. This impression is also given
because the article introduction is written in the 3rd person
narration which gives a more objective analysis on the matter of alcohol. I
found this introduction easy to write as it felt more natural, however due to
the narration being in 3rd person; the language used and the phrase,
‘Many young people...little do they know’ the introduction slightly belittles
teenagers due to ‘pointing the finger’ at the age that tends to consume alcohol
the most. If I were to aim this introduction at the younger target group more
effectively, I think I would still use a fairly short quotation as this intrigues
the reader. However, I would most likely switch the narration at the end of the
introduction so that the target audience is specifically aimed at.
